Wednesday 29 June 2011

Static in the Rain

Standing still in time
-Motion blur all around her-
Chin facing skyward

Mascara tracks weave webs
Across her porcelain skin
Driving rain beats down
Onto her smiling face

The bustle of the world
Is muted
As she feels a kiss
From each raindrop lover

6 comments:

  1. Painted a great picture with your words, love how all just stops and she just takes it in.

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  2. the raindrop lovers are worth that the mascara gets ruined...i gladly give in to them...smiles...happy rain day!

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  3. ah love the raindrop lovers line...and if the mascara was running before the shower i hope it sooths her...

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  4. Very strong visuals here, Like this esp -

    Mascara tracks weave webs
    Across her porcelain skin

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  5. Oh, I love those last two lines...great imagery here, made we wish to be standing out there in the rain.

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  6. Thanks all for your lovely comments :-) ..this is the first time I've really shared my efforts at writing so the nice comments are so lovely to read! ..wish I could figure Blogger out a little more though, I'm finding it difficult!

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